I read the Kickstarter update and that helps it make more sense what you were trying to go for. I'll be playing through it at least a couple more times, so I'll keep all that in mind when I do and see how I think it fits with that.
Well, I think if I need to explain my intention for people to not think it has issues, then it probably needs work regardless. I'll have to go over it a bunch and see what I can come up with, and I'll post the new scripts here for thoughts.
-Matt Gilgenbach
Lead Frightener at Infinitap Games
To be honest, I think the only things that are needed are clarity (as in the quality of the actual clip itself) and volume tweaks. Yes, the writing and delivery are a bit clunky, but I feel that gives the characters, character. It makes them feel more genuine and gives the dialog sequences a surreal feeling to them.
That's good to hear! We will definitely re-record it, so it sounds better, and I did tweak the scripts slightly to make it a little less awkward. It's still pretty awkward though. hahah
-Matt Gilgenbach
Lead Frightener at Infinitap Games